R1 Writer Sakura Results (2024)
Round 1 Results
Writer CamelliaSakura League
Final Deadline: May 18th 2024
Judged by: Minty & Sketch
Feedback released ~11:30pm12:30am EST 6.10.9.23.2024
Match 1
Zeke vs OverdrawCorrin & PandoraCitron vs. Simon Keyes
ZekeCorrin & Citron
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OverdrawSimon & PandoraKeyes
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Unfortunately due to life circumstances ZekeCorrin had& toCitron forfeitforfeited this round. We hope shethey can enjoy hertheir time in Crossroads!
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N/A |
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26.5N/A |
54N/A |
6N/A |
OverallVerdict: Winner:Second OverdrawWind & PandoraSlot
+100%
Total Knock-out!
Match 2
Toffee BrownScythe vs Nerassa & Quinton SalzarRaviaki
Toffee BrownScythe
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Nerassa & Quinton SalzarRaviaki
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YouWelcome hitback theMs. groundScythe! runningFun withto settingsee upScythe's theWisayumei-Tizuka twoflavored PTSD as foils--the dichotomyone of the two'sreturning morningscharacters wasfrom aour fantasticprevious tone-setter to the entire entry.OCT. You put a lot of effortwork into usingfleshing out the environment and people for Scythe to interact with, however I found Scythe's flirting pushed into OOC bounds and wasn't comfortable to read. Overall you did a good job with your opponentsopponent, notforeshadowing, justand asthe characters to beat, but as actual characters. Character dialogue can be improved to be more natural, but overall a strong entry. fight. |
You had a lot going onweaved in thisall roundof the characters in well- I was never overwhelmed by kickingthe it off with a murder mystery! There were a lotamount of characters toused, keepand trackit ofreally fleshed out Ravi's outsider experience in thisCrossroads! entry,The whichillustrations were great too-- satisfying read that was progressivelyhighly moredetailed difficultand as the round went on. Overall the entry would have benefitted from more editing. It was a unique fun read!fun.
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2416 |
46 |
6.5 |
24.5 |
32.539 |
4 |
27 |
54 |
7 |
Overall Winner: Toffee BrownRaviaki
+17.8%33.3%
Match 3
NalagromAndrea & BaladethOctavia vs QuinVivian Huang & Jian Er'Ziu
NalagromAndrea & BaladethOctavia
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QuinVivian Huang & Jian Er'Ziu
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You put so muchI love Andrea and detailOctavia's intodynamic-- everythe characterdrama usedand intension the two have throughout your round!round helps Youkeep incorporatedthe Quinmomentum going, and hercreates character,a backstory,lot of intrigue between them. Vivian had a good dynamic with the girls and lorethe seamlesslyfight intowas Nalagrom's own story. Her presence felt naturaldynamic and important--she shared the spotlight and had some really touching moments with Ms. X and Baladeth.interesting.
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QuinUnfortunately is such a lovable character and impossible notdue to rootlife for!circumstances HerVivian interactionsHuang with& Ms.Jian XEr'Ziu throughoutforfeited arethis amazinground. andWe adorable. Having to work together with Nalagrom was amazing to see ashope they begrudginglycan helpedenjoy onetheir another.time in Crossroads!
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2817 |
55.5 |
6.5 |
26 |
5338 |
6 |
N/A |
N/A |
N/A |
Overall Winner: NalagromAndrea & BaladethOctavia
+5.7%70.1%
Super tough! Really close fight!
Match 4
RedKiriata Hood& Azta vs Myrelle & PhariaVarila
RedKiriata Hood& Azta
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Myrelle & PhariaVarila
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RedWhat Hood's dialogue flows like poetry; it's reallya fun toread! readIt herkept interactionsthe withmomentum differentall characters.the Greatway use of Red Riding Hood's cultural figure status as a backdrop to provide imageryup to the piece!end. OverallI felt that Varila could've gotten a stronglittle entry.more screen time pre-fight, but you did a fantastic job with her as an opponent. You tied up the fight in a way that keeps the story going for both teams-- "No one goes home sad" is a great goal for these two!
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MyrelleWhat &an Phariaaction-packed haveand suchemotional round 1! The world was crafted beautifully and the opponents were used as great foils. Try to keep important moments within the scored round-- other than that, the prologue was a complexgreat and deep relationship that quickly endears the readerlead-up to the characters.round. ThematicGreat elementsjob of Red Riding Hood were used well! We would have loved to see Red Hood appear earlier inwith the entry to interact more.writing!
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25.521 |
5354 |
5 |
22.524 |
3956 |
57 |
Overall Winner: Red HoodVarila
+19.6%8
Second Wind: Kiriata & Azta
A note for second winds & the possibility of being matched up in the third and final round-- canon should follow the creator's own version of events throughout the tournament, so both Kiriata & Azta and Varila will continue with their R1 canonicity. Discrepancies later on can be regarded as the God Eater manipulating dimensions and character interactions to force more situations-- if it is alternate world versions or not is at your discretion. Canon conflicts should not be much of a problem for the second round-- if there will be a canon conflict concern after R2 results are released, we can discuss it further then.
This decision only affects the R2 opponent and side of the bracket (Kiriata & Azta will be fighting the other bracket half opponent, Raviaki).